A drab gray room

This was quite interesting. It's one of those poems that has a lot of hidden meaning and it makes you think. The message isn't always right there clear in front of you. That's what I kind of like about this. Of course, the last line just plain confused me.

To give up freedom to be free.

This was quite a good poem. Aside from the usual nitpicking on punctuation, grammar, etc. I'd say you used a great rhyme scheme that was appropriate to the story - also, it had a lot of thought, which was great.
Unfortunately, it lacked a little in emotion. I get what you were trying to say, about feeling empty/desolate/disgraced (at least those are the feelings I get), but I just don't feel it quite to it's full potential.

Aside from that, keep writing, you did quite a good job on this.

This poem was....saddening, in a way that's hard to capture. Like the view of someone locked in an insane asylum, staring out the single window into the night sky.
I really liked the flow of the poem. Even moreso, I liked the second stanza, when you talked about Mercy. I thought it was clever and interesting to present mercy as a figure, as a person who might save you, (or the person) from the "Drab Grey Room."
The only thing I didn't like- it was a little difficult to understand what the character was afraid of. Like Kat said, the "sin" part was difficult for me to understand. However, the mystery gives it a mystical and dangerous feel, like a cold dagger.

Very nicely done.

RA

I enjoyed your piece! It was short, yet had alot to it. It had a nice flow to it, a smooth rythym throughout. I few things left me wondering about them, but that could add to the intrigue of it all. I especially liked the last line...

To give up freedom to be free.