Young Writers Society

Humorous piece, not a lot of content to review here, but I'll give it my best.

Grammar/Wording
Your grammatical style seems to be long run-on sentences (Reasons 1,2,4,5,9) short matter of fact statements (Reasons 3 & 6) and short dialogue statements (Reason 7, 8, 10). While this grammar may be inappropriate for any other form of literature I think that it is fine for "Reasons Why" lists.

The wording has content specific to Nate/YWS that is humorous for people familiar with YWS but also content specific to phones (Candy Crush, phantom vibrating, finger cramps) which is good as it can be humorous to a wide range of audiences and not seem to vague.

My only real wording critique is that I would be careful in using phrases like "Thank the lord" and "oh god!" in pieces that are meant to appeal to a wide range of audiences/be humorous to a lot of people. While you may gain some points for being dramatic, phrases like these can also alienate people who identify with a religious background that recognizes a God, and may see this language as very disrespectful. (For a Christian, Jew, or Muslim using a phrase like "oh god!" in this context is just as disrespectful as putting a couple swear words in. While it is up to your personal preference and sensibilities of course, it just may help in future work to avoid using language like this in humorous pieces to avoid alienating a particular audience of readers.

Formatting
If you edit this list or do another one of these pieces I would suggest interspersing your long run-on sentences with you quicker reasons, or do every other one for variety's sake. I liked the formatting of this piece the line breaks and the bold text made it clear to read. I would maybe suggest changing the written out numbers to just numbers ie. 1 instead of one - just for a quicker and clearer read.

Overall Meaning/Impressions
Overall this piece was funny and looks like it succeeded in its intended task. I could not find some deep profound meaning behind it, but that is not generally the intention of "Reasons why" lists.

Good luck in future writing!

~alliyah

I love this already! I have only read reason one, and it is hilarious! In this paragraph, there could be a few more punctuation. I like it so far!

So nate is afraid of scams or no one. This was funny! Wow! I think my grandma has the same fears though. That makes this even funnier.

That should scare anyone, reason three!

I just love the wording! I don't think you can make it sound anymore scientific.

I love reason number five. Sometimes, I wonder how I haven't had a heart attack with rings.

Wow! What is up with number 6? I like it, but what is he saying?? That is really funny, I had similar issues, but it wasn't serious.

My mum can't stop playing this ^^_^^ She is super, totally obsessed.

Why is your finger cramping so much? If you don't use your phone, it won't hurt. You don't have to be afraid of it. ^^

I like the use of this website in number nine.

How is number ten a fear? Well, is it suppose to be him afraid of hallucinations?

Okay, so this was absolutely hilarious! I read them out loud to my friends, and the all loved it! Thank you for sharing this with us!

~PerfectWeapon

Ten reasons≠cleverness