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Worlds Apart (Draft)

by CaptianRandom

Published July 22, 2012

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I'm going to hold you for the last time. I'm going to cry but I try not to let it show. This is the hardest way to say goodbye, because as you walk away I'm feeling so alone. We both agreed because we were forced to and now I regret it, there are so many things I should have said. It’s going to be hard to get to sleep at night, because I know I will think about the way it could've been. I will see you every time I close my eyes and I’ll try to shut you out, but instead I’ll let you in. I can’t pretend I wanted this to end. It’s hard to believe that a couple of weeks ago I didn’t know you. My life was miserable without you. You were out of this world, out of my world at least. I remember the day I met you when I was being bullied at school. I ran home and cried in my garden, as the tears made their way down my face I noticed a glow in the trees, I thought it was just the tears fogging up my eyes. As I walked closer and closer to it I became more curious as to what it was. After staring for a few minutes something started to happen, A person was emerging from this glow in the trees, you where emerging from it. We both stared at each other in confusion ‘What just happened’ you asked. At the time I was as confused as you where, but as soon as I looked into your eyes I knew there was a connection between us. After talking for a while we finally realised that you were not from the same world as I was, things were different from my world to yours. Your sky was pink, mine was blue. Your water was purple, mine was clear. You seemed interested so I showed you around. After week and weeks of getting to know you I realised that I had fallen in love with you. I tried keeping you a secret from my parents; we didn’t want anyone to know about the portal. But I remember the day mum walked in on us, she asked who you where, so we decided to tell. I then realised that mum and dad where guardians of the portal. Nothing could come in or out into a different world, for if it did and stayed in this world for too long, the world would start to disappear. I can't pretend it didn’t happen. What I'd give for one more day, just to say the things I need to say, but now its time to say goodbye and I can't pretend I wanted this to end for you and me. Today is that day I have to let you go. I'm holding back the tears, I'm here alone, forgetting all the years, we have to live our different lives, it’s going to be so hard because there's no more you, and I. We're worlds apart, and now there's nothing I can do to bring you back to me.

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TheWorldIsMyLife wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2012

This is very very good, despite it only being a draft copy. At times it is rushed a teeny little bit but that's only being picky. Maybe paragraph it, this also makes the story seem longer :P.

I love the part where you are saying "Your sky was pink, mine was blue. Your water was purple, mine was clear. You seemed interested so I showed you around." It's just a nice part to add to the story :)

I love this. Keep writing :)

~The World.

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CaptianRandom wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2012



fun fact i hear my evil twin once wrote a story about a hacker who used the name fyshi33k bc there are 33k-ish species of fish and she liked phishing so fyshi-33k made sense but then she got super embarrassed when someone forced her to explain
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