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Hi there! You probably saw that I review a later chapter, and I was really enjoying it so I decided to read the whole thing from the beginning. I'll try keep my reviews short as quite a few people have left reviews before me, obviously, and probably said most of what I'll be thinking as I read it This was a really interesting interaction. We're straight away introduced to Winslow and assume he's lost someone dear to him. I liked the dynamic between Reginald and Winslow and we can tell they go back a while.I'm excited to read the rest now
On the second day of September in the year of 1945, Captain Winslow A. Smith of the OSS sat in a small cafe in a mildly damaged portion of Berlin, sipping at a cup of tea while listening to radio reports of surrender.
as the commanders feared the Japanese government would make a last suicide attempt against the Allies
I can go home and be free from this shit hole and from this goddamn war.
Hey, I saw you say something about needing reviews for your latest chapter the other day, so I thought I'd try and catch up Nit-picks (let me know if you don't want these in future):
“Maybe you should lay off the sugar in your tea, Reggie. Even the furniture is starting to notice.”Winslow looked up at the man in front of him, giving a quick wink before moving focus to the goons that surrounded the agent.
Reginald waved them out of the room while asking, “Aren’t you at least going to give me a kiss on the cheek, Winslow?”
He took a match from the book on the table, lit a cigarette and dropped the piece into a waiting ashtray. Very little hot air was added to the room, but it was quickly filled with smoke from the Camel. To combat him, Winslow took one from his own pack of Chesterfield’s
While watching the tears run down his friend’s face, Winslow took Reggie’s hand back in his own and tried to comfort him.
Something I think is very important (in any piece of writing really.) But mainly in period works like historical fiction or historical nonfiction is setting the scene well describing those little details like dust in the sunlight or character tapping his or her glass can really go a long way in setting a scene and the mood of the story. From paragraph one you did a wonderful job at doing just that.I'm really wondering what will happen next, and especially whether Winslow is going to change his decision, and the effects of it as well.
Hello wolf!One thing you should know about me is that i love stories about the world wars( especially the second one), so as soon as I read the first line i knew Im going to love this. You started by telling your readers what year it is, which is great, but I would recommend maybe not telling your readers that, and giving a description of Winslow's condition, or of the world around him to indirectly tell your readers what year it is, and what's going on. And if the exact date is an important aspect of how the story will progress, you could sneak the date in (maybe adding some dates of events in the war to the file, and progressing from there).I believe the whole thing is well narrated and is the perfect blend of descriptions, dialogue and prompts(that's the word I use to describe things in a story/poem that make the reader think).Im really impressed by Winslow's character dovelopment, and you have done a great job constructing this character. Reggie's character is also well constructed.I loved some of his dialogues, like "even the furniture is starting to notice". That was quite unusual but really added a lot to Reggie's character. I see some contrast in both these characters. They both seem to have suffered equally (we obviously don't know their backstories yet but that's what's been given out at this point) but have very different reactions. However, I think there is much more depth to Winslow's character and back story which led him to this decision, and loss is just something he's giving off.I'm curious as to where Reggie's character is going to go from here on, and what importance its going to be given. I hope to see him as one of the main characters( i like him!).I'm really intruiged and and already starting to figure out what's going to happen next, and especially whether Winslow is going to change his decision, and what's going to cause that.Overall, this is just wonderfull. I loovvveed it! One last thing: could you please notify me when you upload the next part, I would love to read more.Thanks for uploading. Have a great day/night.-Ani
Hello there C: I figured I would stop by and give you a little feedback on this novel that I've been very excited to get to read!Since this is a historical fiction story, I like getting some instant background - the year is helpful, the month is interesting, and the setting really helps place this! For the story to start right at the end of World War 2, I'm quite curious as to what kind of role fighting in this war could have on Winslow, and the kind of life he had been living and what kind of life he's now going to live.As far as going over the characters, Winslow seems like a well-developed figure. He's definitely got some wit to him - ("Even the furniture is starting to notice") that was an unexpected comment, but funny nonetheless. The contrast between Captain Smith and Reginald is quite interesting - Smith does appear to want to follow the rules/laws as close as he can and to simply get out of the war area once the war has finished, and he seems hopeful despite his past losses. Reggie has an understable opinion about their futures as well, but it's hard to dissuade someone from wanting something better than their current circumstances.Also, I like the underlying themes of like love/loss already in this prologue - from the name "Peter" mentioned one can assume that both of these characters are a little less straight than the typical person in 1945 might claim to be.
The agent reached his hand across the table, carefully stroking Winslow’s fingers, and bringing them up to kiss the tips gently.
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