Published October 27, 2005
I can't believe my eyes,
Have i decieved my own self once again in believing i know what's best for me.
How can all fot his be true,
You told me all of this would happen,
But i foolishly just dismissed all that you had said.
Now all that i have is a feeling of regret that just won't go away.
No matter how hard i try to forget i just can't forget,
Now that it's embedded in my mind.
It's just like a scar,
A scar that just keeps getting bigger and bigger.
Oh why won't this all just go away.
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Please people tell me what you think this represents my life right now.
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Yeah sorry I didn't comment on this last night, the YWS was making me type in Chinese for some odd reason...
I think you should honestly capitilize the I's considering the first letter in each line is capitalized as well.
"You told me all of this would happen,
But i foolishly just dismissed all that you had said.
Now all that i have is a feeling of regret that just won't go away.
No matter how hard i try to forget i just can't forget,
Now that it's embedded in my mind."
That had to be my favorite part... I don't know why but it had to be, becasue if it wasn't then I wouldn't be able to say
But yeah, this was a good poem and after all you summerized for me this is pretty much.
I'm in class now but yeah, I can write more about this when i get home or something...
Very nice, I think it showed your feelings very well. Some of the spelling and grammar mistakes make it hard to read the poem, though.
Good work.
-*Twinkles