Solitude (a Haiku)

Hi.
I'm sorry, I know it's old and all that, but I just had to come and say a word or two on this.

I have no idea what it was before, but actually it is pretty interesting now. It has this nice flow, and it makes the reader red it over and over again.

If one wants to get into deep analyses, one could say you question the true face of everything around us. How people say one and do other, how you can never know what words lay behind the book's covers. You put in that sweet little sarcasm that, well, makes a reader feel like an idiot at first, but the more one reads it, the more they can wonder. Was there really ever the true haiku? If so, where did it go? Why did it go? Do these words hide secrets, some deeper meaning known only to you? There's something that this poem makes the reader feel - something that is not quite easily describable, yet leaves the sense of kinda ominous, cynical.. Emptiness, or lost. As if, one could start questioning everything after reading your words, though you didn't even write it that way on purpose.

Also, the very ending is quite effective. It cuts the other words, ends the feeling of safety that somehow manages to stay there during the first few lines, leaving the readers exposed to their own minds.
Indeed, masterfully deceived.

Admit it, you can't believe I wrote this either.
Always yours,
Aria (also known as Sister) :3

so yes. This was once something else, to clear up confusion that might arise.

Okay, I'll be the first to review your poem. First a bit more on your form:

Haikus are far more than 5-7-5. The modern English version of the haiku uses more of the Japanese concept than most poets are aware of. The 5-7-5 rule is loosely applied, along with a season word or kigo, and a cutting punctuation mark, which compares two ideas, situations or images.

The kigo is an often metonymic word that refers the reader to a specific season, and gives more depth of expression. There are many lists of translated kigo available online, if you'd like to try one.

The cut was originally a cutting word or kireji, and was placed at the end of one of the lines to compare two contrasting ideas, showing both how the latter represents the former and splitting the two. When placed at the end of the last line, it creates a circular pattern and draws the reader back to the start. In English, we usually use a punctuation mark. You might want to consider using one, but that is entirely up to you.

So you don't have to use these, but they do add to the literary value of the haiku.

Now the poem itself:

A good haiku reveals about eighty percent of the subject, but a haiku that reveals only sixty percent is one you never tire of. Remember that haikus are usually like close-up snapshots that show little, but in much detail. It feels to me as if yours verges on revealing too much. Zoom in on the subject. Try rethinking your word choice and seeing if you can find words that more subtly define the subject, or changing the viewpoint of the reader by showing some hidden detail to bring them closer to the subject.

Well done! I can find nothing wrong with the poem, and these things above are merely my suggestions

A very good effort, especially for a first! Congratulations on your choice of form. Keep going!

This is my first poem, so be lenient