Neoptolemus Pyrrhus

by Caesar

Published January 19, 2017

16+ Violence

In Poetry

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

PreviousNext

Hateful Enyalios, hound of war!

guide my spear, that it may fly

straight and true, pierce the shield,

tear flesh, and sunder.


Sacker of cities! before me wracks

Ilium, heaving in its death-throes,

an old woman ravaged by disease,

agonizing in her nuptial thalamos.


Curse of men! I see the Danaans

tremble at the doors of the palace

quivering shields up as naked blades

of grass in winter.They cower! I

am the scythe, the grim harvester!


I am Neoptolemus Pyrrhus, conqueror!

demons of fire, grasping claws of smoke crush

the rosey-fingered dawn as I consume my wrath!


Ripped are the doors from their hinges, like

the son from the arms of his wailing mother:

there is no escape! The palace halls echo

with the cries of widows. Purposefully I stride

towards the altar, unviolated sanctity.


Mad-eyed Polites stumbles into my path

spear drawn, ready to protect all he holds

most dear, I strike him! his life-blood

froths to the floor, he staggers back.


The altar is near now. I see Hecuba

clutching her daughters, fragile caryatids;

standing guard is Priam,pathetic

simulacrum, a shade of whom he

once was, donning his youthful armor.


Polites crawls towards his father, arm

outstretched. He falls in front of the altar,

in a pool of blood. Priam stares at me.

his face is arrogant, but his body is weak.

he speaks, but I do not hear him.


He throws his spear, uselessly. It clangs

against my shield and falls to the floor.

weak!

weak!

weak!


I drag Priam to the altar, knees trailing

in his son's own blood,his daughters scream,

attempt to drag me away, but they are like

twigs that would dam an impetuous river.


My sword cuts into Priam's neck, inexorable.

blood erupts from the wound, staining

the marble altar room crimson.


I am Neoptolemus Pyrrhus, conqueror!

demons of fire, grasping claws of smoke crush

the rosey-fingered dawn as I consume my wrath!

Comments & reviews · 3
User avatar
AngelBunnyroll
Comment
AngelBunnyroll commented Comment · Feb 7, 2017

I love you so much for writing this, this is amazing! Can I show it to my english teacher, if it's alright with you? she loves these kinds of poems.

User avatar
sheysse
Review
sheysse wrote a review Review · Jan 29, 2017

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

I didnt see a whole lot of issues to nitpick... You left out a few spaces after punctuation, but that's small stuff. The rhythm flowed nicely, and the stanzas were broken up well.

I don't know the context personally, though, so it was hard to understand. Maybe give a bit of background? Its just that it was such a nice poem, but I didn't get most of it.

This was a short review, since there wasn't a whole lot to comment on. I only really suggested to add some contsxt, but I hope it helped. Bravo on writing such a nice poem! Adieu!

-Sheyren

User avatar
LadyShadows
Review
LadyShadows wrote a review Review · Jan 20, 2017

Hello! LadyShadows here for a review!
I absolutely loved this piece. This definitely gave me Dante flashbacks. It has a very old poetic feel. This is definitely old fashioned. This piece was filled with figurative language and imagery, which is always good to have with any sort of literature. It was just lovely how you could make the war, blood, and violence come alive with just words! And I love how this is not only a poem, but it seems to have a story feel as well. I also love how you worded this beautifully. I swear, you are a reincarnation of Dante. I have no other words for this lovely piece. Keep writing. I'm a fan!

Caesar replied · Jan 20, 2017

thank you for the kind words! I was trying to re-evoke the old fashioned structure (Vergil), but I wouldn't go as far as comparing myself to the good Father :D

Well I see Dante, like said in the review, but I can Virgil too. Both have lively, bloody, and beautiful poems.



I think that was when I began to realize that reputation isn't everything. I should focus less about how others perceive me and more about what makes me happy. Because, in the end, I have to live with myself.
— Seraphina