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The Five Senses of Obsession
I was meant to be yours
To long for your smile
To fall victim to your gaze
To be your clay to mold
You were not meant to be mine
To feel my skin
To touch my soul
To taste my lips
We mean nothing
But I still feel your breath on my neck
But I still see your face in my pillows
But I still hear your whispers in my bedroom
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Nice poem written by the author.
Love is a divine emotion felt by everyone at one or the other stage of their life. It is when two people find each other attractive in some or the other way, they talk to each other and this feeling of affection can sometimes turn into an obsession when love turns into obsession, a whole new chapter of 'falling from love into obsession' starts and it has no end.
When you are obsessed over or with something, it does not matter what work you are busy with you will only think of that person (or thing), and if somehow you get to see that person or meet that person it feels heaven to you.
The poem is amazing.This is just my opinion but I think the readers would like the poem to be a bit more lengthy (by the way just skip this part and your first poem on this website is great, my first work on this website was not really good).
Keep it up.
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Thank you.
Got it!! Thank u!!
Hey this is Coffee dropping by to leave a humble and quick review!^^
First of all, it’s lovely!! You’re really good even though you might not think it!
I’m a bit of a sucker for sweet romance myself so I totally love this and the title totally fits along with the poem.
I particularly love the line:
It’s really fancy and I guess I love how it’s structured. Overall, 10/10 great poem!!
Have a good day/night!!
Thank uu!!!
Hello! I'll be leaving a quick little review of your poem
First off, I really love the five senses concept. It really hones in how infatuation/obsession completely floods your mind in every way. Also, I really like the line
I feel like it really captivates a possibly unhealthy attachment as it suggests the speaker is willing to give up aspects of themselves for the object of their affection.
Also, I really like how you end the poem with the speaker still replays their memories together. Or perhaps the relationship continues despite not being right for each other? I enjoy the open interpretation there.
I can't think of anything to nitpick. Overall, it was a pleasure to read your poem!
Thank you!