I really, really like everything you're saying here. I totally agree with all of this. Correlation is not causation, and we have no idea what is going through a person's mind or of their true motives. The world would be so much better if everyone were a little more forgiving
I know you wrote this as a post first and you probably haven't really edited it a lot, but I'd like to give you some feedback on how to make it better as an essay, because you have a great start here.
1. You have a lot of spelling mistakes - not many grammar errors, though. I really think if you re-read it a couple of times, you'll catch them, so I'm not going to spend too long on them, except to say that they're quite distracting.
2. You're paragraph spacing is kind of all over the place. You've got some paragraphs with 2 line breaks between them, and some with one. You really only need one unless you switch to a new topic, which should only happen every few paragraphs or less, not every paragraph. I'm pretty sure it wasn't intentional, but you should still probably fix it.
3. You need to put the Harry Potter quote in quotation marks. I didn't realize it was a quote until the last line of it (because I recognized the quote), and many people wouldn't have until you said it was by Sirius. (I loved how you used the quote, by the way. Spot on!)
Nitpicks:
Don't hate, love.
Maybe you should word it as "Don't hate. Love." Just because to some people it'll probably read like you are addressing them as your "love," which I'm pretty sure you're not.
Also, I wouldn't say "I have done horrible things/We've all done horrible things," because I think all the little sins we commit each day don't usually add up to "horrible." Plus it will probably offend some people. Maybe just say "bad." Or "harmful/hurtful." And the last paragraph is a little confusing. I'm not sure what you are calling sin in that line.
That's really all I have to say on the piece as it is. (I have a ton to say on the topic, though.) This a great topic, with plenty of room for expansion.
I think maybe you should emphasize how you can condemn the sin but you have no place to judge the person. I also think there is a lot of room for expansion along the lines of how you can punish someone but still love them (or at least not wish them harm). Also the difference between forgiving someone for what they did and condoning the act. An analogy you could use there would be how a mother can punish her child for something but still love the child.
Also, in order to not irritate non-Christians (and so they can get something out of it), maybe you could add a section about how not hating people makes you happier, more pleasant, more people want to be around you, and you're more likely to gain support for whatever cause you're striving for, if any. Plus a lot of other good things.
These are just suggestions, though, motivated by thoughts I've had before and after reading this. Feel free to add them, or to decide that my ideas are nonsensical and ignore them.
I'd love to talk about the topic more, but this review is already really long and I'm running out of time, so I will just sign off by saying again how much I appreciated this. A lot of this stuff has been running through my mind the past few weeks, and I'm so glad you had the courage to put it on (figurative) paper, because I sure didn't, and I think it needed to be said. Thank you for this.
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