For it is Love

I like that it's simple and short. That said i think that if you added more feeling to it, it would be more powerful to read. For example, on the first few lines, "it can hurt, it brings unbearable pain." this doesn't bring forth a lot of feeling and, in my opinion, that's what poetry is supposed to do. What I would suggest is to add things like instead of just saying, "it can hurt, It brings unbearable pain." say, it can hurt and bring unbearable pain, but also be the most pleasure. Then on the next line instead of just "it's addicting and many think it's a drug" add because they thirst for it and bask in it's presence." When you add things like this it helps the reader feel what you're saying and relate on a deeper level. Also it creates, not only a negative but a positive like you have in the last 3 lines where it switches from pessimistic to optimistic with death and life. If you put this through the whole poem it is better structured. I read that people have issues with the topic of the poem but I don't think that the topic is an issue because there are so many ways to explain love from each perspective so don't shy away from a topic because some think that it's unoriginal. Good luck with your writings.

I think this is a great poem!
You've done a great job here of spacing it out, leaving pauses in just the right places and wording it marvelously!
As TakeThatYouFiend says, it is a very written-about subject of poetry, but i think you've done a very good job considering that this is your first poem and it's a well-written about topic.
Great work here, sorry I can't criticize you on this, it just seems great!
-CFG

I like the poem for its structure, timing and pace, but in my eyes it has a couple of faults. The subject is universal and probably the most written about in the world, which makes it hard to write somthing original. But your work seems a little cliched. Also it is a little on the short side. I don't mean to offend, and I am only offering constructive criticism. Also remember this is only my opinion on the matter. Hope this helps.

I wont lie. Its a good poem...Only good, not great. It has the ability to develop well into something great. One thing is that people have seem several love poems so you've got to make it great and a bit long. But i'll agree and short, simple and good. Do better.

short. six sentences. very short. still, very relatable.