Hey I will be your reviewer today....
First lets talk about the basic concept of this poem...like what it makes me feel about it....
This poem so surely in a rhythm.....like it has a lucid and a smooth flow to it.....it also is very beautiful yet dark and twisted....it also radiates so much darkness and grey love too...like the white love is tainted by the darkness...if you know what I mean....
Secondly let me say about rhe things you could imprive on.....
Division of stanzas....you could divide them in an uniform manner to give it more rhythm....
Punctuations are alright and there are no spellung errors......GOOD JOB!!
Third and lastly,.....how I felt about it......
This poem is so nice and expressive....like a dark love story with a twist or something and its not at all sappy like the usual love stories....it feels so real yet so magical.....like all darkness was wiped away by a little white light which in the end turned grey but then the black darkness turnrd white....or something....
It has such a nice feel to it that I can somehow relate to it....eeveryrhing is personalized very well and in a proper way too....Overall.....GOOD WORK!!!
And yeah...even though I am not 16 yet...I have no problems with languages.....good luck and keep writing.......
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