Hi Ari,
Another very late review coming your way! (Sorry about that. I can't help procrastinating.)
I thought about reviewing the poems individually (and I probably still will, at least a couple of them). But I noticed that the three of them seem to be thematically connected somewhat. They are all, in their own way, expressions of despair—to your credit, you managed the maintain the mood throughout.
Also, I like that you published them together.
Thoughts on Life changes:
Life changes
If life can change,
why can't I?
Why do I have to stay the same?
You sure don't
You are a different person every day
I think throughout Life Changes the narrator is already aware of the conclusion that the poem reaches later on. That change is beyond our control. Either way, is change desirable? Not always, it seems. The narrator says, "I'm not the same." Presumably, they don't like what they have become, changed into. And yet—
If life can change,
why can't I?
—they want to change again.
You are a different person every day
It's an interesting line to end on. If we change everyday, then is change itself a part of the problem?
Thoughts on I wish I was more like you
It feels like a continuation of Without any hint. An aftermath of the second poem's ending with the narrator almost lamenting the best parts of the person long gone. The repetition of the line "I wish I was more like you" stood out and I think it was impactful. I liked how it switched tone at one point,
you moved on
I wish I was more like you
going from an expression of admiration to carrying bitterness.
To summarize, while they work with different ideas—themes of change, abandonment and baggage— I think the poems work really well together. Good work!
~MAS
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