Friend

Hello, Brigitha! Nice to meet you!

A few things about this poem. I noticed from the beginning you have text talk. I think you can change all those "ur"s and capitalization to problems to a different type of piece. This type of writing also got me confused. A section of this poem felt like you were forgetting that your previous words contained text talk, and then you suddenly realized that they did.

"When I 'm on thorns you held me to mend me

You send those beautiful gleeful words from you heart

Which healed me whole.

These are the few words from my heart

Which i pass on to you with cheers,

Without any Tears...

I wish to ve a friend like you throughout the years."

I also don't know what's with the funky capitalization. You may or may not agree with me on this, but at the beginning of each line I think it should be like a sentence put into different lines--they won't be capitalized unless they need to be. I also don't like the capitalization of random letters and lowercase "i"s, either. But it's totally your choice of how it should be.

Next thing. In the last line, was "ve" supposed to be "have"? I can't understand it.

"I wish to ve a friend like you throughout the years."

In this line, I think "barrel" should be "barren".

"With out u i m just a barrel land..."

And that's about all the stuff I have! You might think I disapprove of this piece by my former comments, but I really think it sounds great--keep writing, you have talent!

-wisegirl22

This poem is really nice in my opinion. I don’t really like to butcher and rip up people’s work or be too harsh. But the meaning of the poem is really good. Because to be honest, a best friend or even any kind of friend that you can trust is really hard to find. I know because I only have 1 best friend and she has been my best friend for 9 years, then 10 years next year. But a friend is someone that can and will accept you for who you are and the craziness that you do. Keep working at it.

Unconsoled: tell him it's not pedophile enough. he'll freak out. This is terrible.

Uhmmm, it sounds like this poem is somebody texting and that their spelling corrector is broken.. xD. This had no emotion to me at all. It made me feel nothing. I'm just going to correct this entire thing for you. I also suggest you stop starting nearly every sentence with "a". And it's not ur it's your or you're. It's not "cuz" it's because. It's not "u" it's you.
It's not "wen" it's when. It's not " i ve" it's I've.


A friend is the one who occurs in your mind when you feel you are alone.

A friend is the one who is there for you to lie on when your in midst of hinder.

A friend is the one whom your most comfortable with,

A friend like this is how I want [???? What do you mean?]

A time to sob, a time to glee, a time for horror.

But there no limit for friendship because your my friend,

Its always sunny when I think of you.

But never depressed [not needed at all]

Your the song of my life cuz [it's because.]

With out you, i' m just a barrel land (what the heck is a barrel land?)

Your the only one I can share my burden on

When I feel heavy to share on

When I 'm on thorns you held me to mend me,

you send those beautiful gleeful words from you heart,

that healed me whole.

These are the few words from my heart,

Which I pass on to you with cheers,

Without any tears...

I wish to have a friend like you throughout the years.