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I really liked this poem. It looks almost like a pulse line, which is fitting since the poem itself just oozes of life. It describes a life changing event, but not in an over dramatic way. It seem really realistic actually. There are a lot of undertones of real-life hardships the fact the speaker had to move to have greater opportunity, the child seemed to know only the harsh things of city life as well only ever having lived in the more rural areas. I love the soft way all this came across as well, with the youngest child pointing out the beauties the older people overlooked, allowing them to notice a bright side of sorts. The mothers dismissal, and focus on the childrens future was also a great move.
I would say correct 'maths' to math but it gives the poem a youthful glow reminding the reader the speaker is still a child. I love that and I wouldn't want it to change honestly. I like the grammar you used it fits well, and the dashes too. The capitaliation is nice as well, I wouldn't mind more poems like this at all. Keep writing.
Have a nice day/night. Keep writing. Much love, CoffeeGemini <3333333
Points: 33
Reviews: 105
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