Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Prologue: My life is a dizzying mix of reality and fantasy; My mom is from an ancient line of seers, and my dad comes from a family of doctors. Both sides put pressure on me to become great, and it's enough to drive anyone to their breaking point. Finally, I've hit mine. I'm holding on to the end of my rope with one hand, the other desperately clutching to the last of my sanity. It's all to much for me to handle, so I decide to pack my bags and leave in the middle of the night. Only, when I'm gone, I realize just how unprepared I was. When cloaked strangers show up and capture me, I have to figure out what secrets my parents have kept from me. If I can't , I'll only have a few more weeks, until my 16th birthday. Then all hell will break loose - literally.
OKayyy...well this seems like a cross between the very first couple of lines of a first chapter, and then the last few lines of the blurb of the book with said first chapter, all wrapped up in what is meant to be a prologue here....so yeah, we've got a little bit of confusion right there.
Especially those last lines...I feel like they don't sound at all like the sort of thing that you'd expect in a prologue, it just seems like a blurb and almost doesn't seem particularly connected to the actual story that was happening in that first couple of lines. You might want to look into a bit of a rewrite on that one there.
Now, moving past that particular confusion and to the actual idea of this work here...well I would say it is actually quite a cool premise you've got here. We've got some exciting things getting thrown around here...and as chaotic as the pacing is right here, I'd say this does a fairly good job of getting your attention. This definitely sounds like a story that I would potentially read here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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