Prologue
United Nations Headquarters, New York City, 2078
The wide, dimly lit conference room was alive with arguments, most of them in the annoying self-righteous way of politicians. The Secretary-General stood at the raised podium the East side of the building. Her face was creased with fatigue, hands wrung together. She had just passed the last document for the Bunker program, a plan to bury 10,000 people in 400 bunkers across the world. This way while the rest of them died from heat and lack of food and storms and a million other things that the climate crisis would throw at them, they could be preserved. Humanity would be preserved.
When they emerged though, most of their humanity would soon disappear. Stripped of it by necessity like a dandelion in a hurricane, they would revert to ancient methods and be once again, hunter-gatherers, and Earth could only sustain about 10,000 individuals.
If only there’s an Earth waiting for them when they emerge. She thought, hands stroking her chin, too exhausted to try and solve that problem too. Scientists were looking into doing something along the lines of quadrupling the genetic material in animals and plants globally to allow for more rapid evolution, but she couldn’t be bothered to worry about it. She had other things to think about, like the selection process.
There were 50 spots in the cryogenic vats from each bunker that would be randomly selected by the UN, as well as the 25 people maintaining the vats. The other 50 would be given to the most powerful regional government to decide how they would be dispersed, on the condition that they couldn’t select themselves or their loved ones. She had spent many long nights figuring what to do, and this was her conclusion.
The determined woman was jostled back to the present by the sudden silence that fell over the room. The rows of representatives and officials stared at their desks, fiddled with pens, and clasped their hands.
The delegate from Fiji made his way up to the stand in a controlled manner, walking as if strings were attached to him, and then he started to speak. His voice was frustrated, yet subdued, like boiling water in a pot.
“I beg of you,” He plead, voice trembling, “Please do something; redraw the regional borders, add more bunkers, anything.” The dark-skinned man’s hands were balled into fists, his brow lowered over his eyes, burdened by defeat.
In the left corner of the room a tall black-haired man in a suit stood up.
“That’s not possible. You aren’t close enough to any other regions, and adding more vaults is out of the question,” the Canadian representative interjected coldly, his voice measured and political, as always.
“You’re just going to let my people go extinct?” Hands turned in front of his face.
“The fate of humanity rides on this movement. It is with regret that we leave behind your country for the good of mankind. Plus, there’s still a chance for one of your people to be selected. May God remember you.” The Secretary-General issued decisively, leaving no room for argument in the wide meeting hall they were stationed in.
The Fijian man was silent for a moment besides his heavy pained breathing which could be heard by all in the room. Then he spoke.
“Our people don’t need you or your Western Gods to remember us.We’ll survive and remember ourselves in spite of your mercilessness, your apathy,” He spat on the ground next to him, barely outside of the UN logo he stood on.
“I hope you can feel the blood of all the people you’ve condemned on your hands. I hope it burns.” And with that he turned and hotly strode out of the room.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
Hello Brady! I'm Ranger, here to leave a review on your prologue here!
I must say, this was very exciting to read! It pulled me in instantly with the description of the setting and the decisions made! In addition to this, I also really love how you described the plan and gave the situation a bit of world building from the start and describing the situation instead of leaving the readers in the dark until the first chapter. The explanation alone I feel was an even more intriguing tactic to pull a reader in then leaving them in the dark is while still keeping the anticipation and excitement! I also really love how you clearly outlined opposition and left the potential for it to turn out to be much bigger in the coming chapters!
In the technical side of things, I can't really say that I have any critiques! this was very well written with the characters, the feeling of the tenseness of the room, and what is predicted to happen in the future. Everything flows nicely and you don't have any sections that feel choppy or out of place.
The anticipation of the piece has left me wanting to read more of this story and so I will be sure to read the other chapters! Keep writing and I am super excited to see how this will turn out!
This was an absolute pleasure to read! Hopefully you found this review helpful and you have a wonderful day/night!
Farewell for now!
-Ranger
This is gooooood (yes all the o's are completely necessary). It's short, but it is a bold precursor for things to come. This is such a smart idea, the bunkers. Because you see everyone as they really are when death knocks, and for all but 10,000 it will. I feel like this would lead to rioting, protests, the like. Now that I think about it, this would be a really good video game idea. Maybe the heat creates new creatures, or new humans??!!! Anyway, awesome stuff, can't wait for the rest (fingers crossed pretty please with sprinkles on top).
Thank you so much for reading my work. It truly does mean a lot to me. Also I was talking to my dad about that kind of thing, like what some governments might do to decide who gets to be in the bunker ie. lotteries, selling them, or one of the more interesting things might be competitions where the winners get to stay. We also played with the idea of it being kept a secret, but instead we thought it would be a public thing. I'm sure there would have been stuff like that, along with a lottttt of organized rebellions, terrorist attacks, etc, but in the end it wouldn't matter because they would all eventually die anyways.
Yeah, right now I'm lining it up to where animals and plants could evolve that rapidly to cope with the heat, but then I'm going to have the Earth kind of rebound because the atmospheric composition will be similar to that of the Cretaceous period, so I fell in love with the idea of exotic bioluminescent plants and animals. I like the idea of having new humans too, maybe like just one percent of the population survives and they slowly evolve to become blatantly superior to humans. I'll definitely think more about that. Again, thank you so much for reading it!!
Yes it was my pleasure to read.