Well.....TAH DAH!
I don't know what to believe.
I fall harder every day,
And it's for you.
I dream every night,
It's of you.
I don' t know what I feel.
One question breaks my heart.
Is this real?
I don't want this to end,
'Least, not like the last time.
Last time I barely lived through the heartache,
And I don't want my heart to break.
Is this real?
Are you lying?
I can't stand it if you are.
Tears threaten while I look over this page,
And I don't want to cry.
Not if this isn't real.
Is this real?
Tell me the truth,
Because my heart bleeds just for you.
I hate this feeling.
Over and over I cry and laugh,
I scream and sing.
Is this real?
Or am I falling into something that I shouldn't
Is this love
Or something not as deep?
IS THIS REAL?
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Don't forget the two question marks! (Just in case you didn't notice I put them in bold.)
Anyway back to the poem. I really like it and surprisingly, it flows really nicely. There is alot of repetition but that's what makes it flow so good. (Well in my opinion anyway.) There are alot of questions aswell, but I like that your asking yourself and don't know what to do in the poem. I like that you just summed it up with 'Is this real?' It was a real, nice ending and it wasn't forced or anything.
Congratulations! A very nice flowing poem which I enjoyed reading. I hope to hear more from you and your poems.
beautiful...
marvelous...
it relates to each and every lover in this world.... really very touching...
keep up the good work...
Hey there!
This poem that you wrote is to say the least great. The way your express your emotion in the poem really flows nicely due to your parallel structure and repetition. Along with the imagery you use, it all provides for a bittersweet picture and really gives something for the reader to relate to.
Keep on writing and the best of luck!
Well done this is a really original poem. Yeah, everybody else is right, you can relate to it. Keep Writing!
XxX
This is a great poem! I can feel the depth in it
-sachipachi1
simply beautiful. i love how you added the poetic device repetition into this- very well played. i feel this :] amazing poetry and writingg skills, you seem to have in your hands
keep up the good work!
my favorite stanza.
My favorite lines were;
beautiful. the character's or person's doubt,misery,regret, and love is clearly shown here. BRAVO! :]
i know just how you feel! and you know who about! I'm not trying to be mean but he is really not worth all the torture you've been through this past year!
Even though you said you didn't really feel this poem, I did feel as if I could relate to this post. It was really beautiful. But you have to remember to always start a new line of poetry with a capital, even if you're in the middle of a sentence. Keep on writing!