Published November 1, 2011
Parting of souls
where we all come together
mourning for the wretched soul.
Sinners alike to shed their judgement
letting it fall into our laps
A massacre of hate.
Hypocrites that scorn you;
cut into your soul
will all come together at your parting.
Lets all pretend
that love was spread,
and a funeral held in your name
had not an ounce of hate.
However had every ounce of false happiness.
Perhaps the false love was good enough
and your soul settled into its eternity.
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
141,299 Literary Works • 674,334 Reviews
I liked that part.
...
That was pretty dark and intense, but i have to admit that was why I enjoyed it. But, the meaning behind your poem, i couldn't completely grasp... so if you want to tell me i would love to hear it.
How long have you been writing for? Was it about anyone or anything at all?
Sami.
This is my favorite line.
I liked this. What I liked most about it was that it was brief but still impressive . It didn't drag on the meaning in the poem and it's kind of hard to actually get straight to the poem when you know you want to say more so great job at this. Keep writing.