WOW I DIDN'T SEE THAT COMING I have to say that was an extremely well hidden plot twist! Despite having multiple guesses as to what could happen if he ate too much jam, I still couldn't predict the ending!
I think that's definitely my favourite part of this story! Another thing I loved is the tone and atmosphere in the story: it was sort of eerie, unsettling and absolutely perfect for a horror story like this!
Overall, I enjoyed this immensely! Thanks for sharing and keep growing <3
Hey! This was a story with an ending that I didn't see coming, and I liked it. So, let's see what I have to say about it! 
The ghosts can’t hurt you, no matter what they want you to think.
“I have here a glass goblet and the last can of peaches.”
“I have here my baby teeth, saved from when I was little.”
“I have here a dried-up rose from a vase on the mantelpiece. They say it was of a lover who died of grief.”
“Go to that cupboard and eat a jar of the jam. Then you shall live another day.”
“Go to that cupboard and eat five jar of the jam. Then you shall live another day.”
“Go to that cupboard and eat ten jars of the jam. Then you shall live another day.”
Strange. There seemed to be one more ghost than usual.
Hey! This was an interesting read. Here are some things I noticed:
I think in this line
'has' doesn't fit very well here. I think it's a different tense than the rest of the story. Maybe 'had' would work better.Apparently his family has known before he did
The idea is supposed to be that eating too much of the jam stuff turns you into a ghost. The ghosts that are there are the ghosts of other diseased people that wanted to live longer and made deals with the witch.
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