Published June 14, 2011
A/N: Hey Guys, this is just alittle one i wrote when i was feeling alittle alone today. Hope you like it. Please, if you will, reviews are very much appreciated. Thanks, Love you Guys, Black Ink x.
I've got no one.
No one to hold me close.
No one to tell me it'll be ok.
No one to talk to.
No one to shut the door of hate.
No one to talk to late at night.
I can't eat,
Nor sleep.
But when sleep does seem to find me,
I dream of you,
Only you.
Is it wrong to wish to be in your arms again?
To be sorry I ever let you go?
© Courtney Harris June 14, 2011 7:22 PM
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Yay! *Applause* awesome poem.
*applause stops and then commentator turns very serious*
Wow, this is an awesome poem, very deep and emotional. I really liked your way with words, and the repetive words you used. I think your flow and sense of rhythm was very good too. I have nothing to criticize except there is one little tiny adjust I might make.
You say:
I think it might be better if you repeat the I can't and put 'I can't sleep' instead.
But apart from that minor detail I think the poem is amazing!
Your poem was exquisite.I could feel the emotions and meaning you were portraying.There was a nice flow and rhythm.You did vary well.Nice job.
Thanks Heaps!
I will be sure to.
Black Ink x.
Again, I have to say that I like this poem. It’s just like some of the stuff that I write and brings me back to that moment when I felt such emotion. You should write some more so I can keep telling you I love it.
Thanks Alot!
I appreciate your reviews very much, and i like to hear when my readers like my work. I am planning to upload so much more when i get heaps more points, so if ya want, it would be awesome if you could check 'em out and review em for me. Thankies
Black Ink x.
I liked your piece alot and thought the flow was really perfect. For someone who was lonely for a night you sure know how to cook up a storm for writing......I actually felt the emotion behind it, which was a first for me.
Overall: good Job.
THanks a heap Scarlet.
Im thinking that once i get more points, ill upload some of my short stories or one shots.
SIncerely,
Black Ink. x.
I thought was really powerful and emotional. :} I think you should definitely should write more.
Thanks, Reviews mean aload to me
Hey there,
short,simple,to the point and yet so full of emotional. I love blank verse because it harbors the most intimate of thoughts and feelings. Keep writing. Good job!
xx Upilexx