Published May 8, 2006
You've heard of pfifers and fiddlers, and poems relating to them, but what about a taburasac. Yes the Croatian tamburica(Tahm-Boo-Ree-Tza) is an interesting instrument, of the string family. The common kind is a small guitar (kind of like a ukelele, only more lute-ish) with a high-pitched noise, and it's this popular Croatian folk instrument that I wrote a poem about:
The Tamburasac*
There was a Tamburasac,
Him I knew quite well,
And every time I met with him
I was forced into a dance:
'Cuz he'd take his tamburica
And pluck the strings with vigour,
And no sooner had he done so
That I'd dance myself a fever
My mind would be arace,
My heart would be apace,
My feet would be all sore:
Yet my face a smile bore!
This went on for hours,
Or for days for all I cared,
But until his fingers stopped,
My body wasn't spared!
*(Note-Tamburasac is pronounced: Tahm-Boo-Rash-Atz)
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The first stanza does have a rhym pattern! Tamburasac, and Dance; thus: a b c a
Or did you not see the note?
"*(Note-Tamburasac is pronounced: Tahm-Boo-Rash-Atz)" the c, in croatian, is pronounced like a 'ce' in English.
And I understand that the poem doesn't have one set rhyme pattern. I realized while writing it. I think it's the third stanza that stands out...
This seemed like it should have a rhyme structured - as in, it didn't appear random in many spaces. This is your poem, rhyme wise:
(the first stanza has no rhymes)
A
B
C
B
D
D
E
E
F
G
H
G
It doesn't make much sense, as you can see. I love how you picked a sort of odd and rare topic, and liked the poem, nonetheless, but I think you need to work that out there.
Rhyme Scheme?