Hey there!
This is a nice poem! Your title asked a question, and that's what caught my attention, because I wanted to know what the answer was. Your line length is pretty consistent, which makes this poem pleasing to look at. I have a few things I'd like to point out. Now of course, these are just suggestions, so you don't have to listen to them if you don't agree
I think your poem would benefit from stanzas. Right now, it's a block of text and could look intimidating to some. Stanzas would make your poem an easier read.
"But it was not like i was singing you odes,
And although i felt you were not the one,
Your friendship i wanted, but you were done
With our relationship, so i should move on
When i dream of you, i forget you come dawn."
You capitalized your I's for the whole poem up until here. I wonder if you accidentally forgot to capitalize them here, or if you did it intentionally to portray the shift of emotions. I'm not sure what your intention was, so I thought I'd point it out.
"United us together, being in perfect harmony,"
It may just be me, but "being in perfect harmony" sounds a bit strange. How about "living in perfect harmony"?
"Our secrets are shared, our love for The Father,"
You use past tense everywhere except for this line. I would recommend changing it to "Our secrets were shared" to be consistent in your tense.
"It felt as if you gave me many false hopes,
But it was not like i was singing you odes"
Perhaps I am missing something, but I don't get what the second line has to do with the first. You say the speaker didn't sing odes - what does that have to do with having false hopes? Again, I may be missing something, so pardon me cx
Overall, this is a nice poem, and I hope this review helped!
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