Published August 22, 2011
Love is pretty
Love is nice
Love is divine
Love is torture
Worst there is
Love is divine
Love is honest
Love is fun
Love is the best I got
I hate it
I hate her
But love is love not war
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It was short and sweet. What you wrote about love is true. No faults in that. Your poem had the rhythm. It was good. You chose the one word eye-catching to most people, 'love'. I loved all of it exept for the last paragraph,
This threw me off a bit. It just comes out of nowhere, completely confusing the reader. It doesn't really seem to have any relation with the above lines so I'd suggest you work on that. On the whole, good job.
The Poems Fine.
But as the first post said, It's so repetitive >.<
Anyway, it was Fine.
So tired so can't explain the mistakes.
Guess it's already said.
Would give this a 3/5 x]
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it's a very nice and true poem,i liked the meaning/message of it but for the first stanza you could use different words to describe love. something emotional or strong. other than that,nice poem
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It was lazy but I'm lazy so.....yeah it was simple and I put it there to start out as a first that is all and ty.
To be honest, this was sort of sweet, but it was nothing special. It's almost too simple and too repetitive.
Your word choice isn't amazing. Pretty and nice are very simple words, very lazy words. Divine is a great word to describe love, but you've done it twice. If I were you, I would change one of them to something else.
This part came out of nowhere. One minute you're describing love, and the next you're talking about a person. You could probably do something to transition better into the final lines.
I hope this helped, and welcome to YWS! Cheers.
Love hurts this poem is about it's past and future. We all have love but....I just don't care anymore.