Ooh, I really like this one.
(A preface to that comment: I clicked on "They Don't Speak for Us" and decided to check out your other works to get a feel for your style before leaving the review I wanted to read.)
I used to write rhyming poetry a lot and then moved on to free verse, so a lot of the time I find rhyming poetry really singsong and predictable. But this poem didn't feel that way except for a little bit at the last lines, but more on that later. I actually forgot you said in the description you'd written this as a rhyming poem, and then partway through I was like, Oh yeah, this rhymes!
So I think you handled the rhymes really well. On that note, I also liked the fact that your rhymes came very naturally - none of them felt awkward, like you were having trouble coming up with a rhyme. You know, like when a line doesn't quite make sense or is worded in a really unnatural way because it was the only way to make a rhyme happen? And this wasn't an issue in your poem.
Okay, so back to the last lines. I know I said the rhyme did get a little singsongy there, but I think it works that way. It had a bit different feel than the rest of the poem, but I think that really drew attention to the fact that the narrator is prey to the same "addiction" as the "they" they're talking about.
I also love the hashtag in the title.
And now back to our regularly scheduled programming! (I'm off to review "They Don't Speak for Us.")
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