Jada: Eternal Hunter of Lost Souls (Magic)

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okayy...I have a few mixed feelings about this piece here...on one hand, its got some great worldbuilding behind it and the concept seems like it'd be quite fun to read, but its also very much like a bit of a textbook and feels like that's how its continue the whole way through and it is a little boring in some parts.

Anyway let's get right to it,

While it may have occurred to you, or not depending on your relative intelligence, this world contains more than just humans and demons. Exhibit A: Jada Fireblood and the Council. To clarify this issue, I have added this side-note to the original text of this book. To begin, you must come to the understanding that magic is real. If it wasn’t, there really wouldn’t be a point in fighting demons, and we would have given up long ago.

OKayy...I have no idea what exactly this is meant to convey here. There's a nice touch of ambiguity, cause it sounds almost like a slightly pretentious author's note by a fictional author who is writing this perhaps recounting of a tale of some sort...its a very interesting thing to dive into here...and I'm well...let's see, it seems like this sort of personality being shown by this person here is going to be a slight acquired taste, so there's some light concern there, but things are looking okay for the moment.

There are certain types of magic, and certain breeds—I guess one could say—of magic users just as there are levels of demons. There are the mundane and harmless types like faeries, nymphs, and elves (although there is some speculation as to whether elves are in fact harmless, as per the Great Elven Conflict of 1066 BC, but since there have been no other such problems, they have continued to be classified as such). And then there are the more elite types such as wizards, witches, hags, and adepts. Wizards and witches, for the most part, are born with a particular set of skills that makes use of magic easier. While hags and their contemporaries the adepts have to study and learn how to harness magical energy.

OKay, I'm getting a distinct history lesson feel from this whole situation at the moment, which is perhaps not quite ideal, cause it is slightly boring, I feel like just going on about the various species that exist and use magic is maybe not the mosts exciting thing to start with and this is starting to seem a bit stagnant by this point.

Using magic, too, has its problems. Use too much, and you lose strength. Use too little and you have withdrawals. Magic users have to walk a fine line. The best method of keeping in control, and alive, is to wear a charm that dampens magic. Most qualified wizards, witches, hags, and adepts all wear the charm, if only to fit into modern society.

Magic comes in many forms, I will list a few: electricity, the elements, raw power, etc. There really isn’t one common form that magic manifests itself universally. Each user has a slightly different magical presence from one another. It is a useful piece of knowledge when trying to identify who made a certain bit of magic. It is like a magical fingerprint. The most skilled magicians know automatically when magic is being used within a certain radius, and can tell who it is just by the “feel” of it, or so I have been told by my friend Merlin.

Okayy...so the textbook feel continues. On one hand it is somewhat interesting, talking about the mechanics of magic in a world is a lot of fun, but having this all just randomly dumped on us with no proper context and it just kind of ends up being a bit of a bore here and I just don't see any kind of actual story forming soo...this is a bit meh at the moment. I do hope it at least ends on a better note.

All you really need to know is this: Don’t anger a magical being. I know it seems like I say that a lot, and that would be true, but it is only for your own safety. Magic is tricky. It warps the minds of those who are able to use it, and they become paranoid. Paranoid magical beings are dangerous—almost as dangerous as demons. Fortunately, if a magic user becomes a hunter, he or she is required to wear a magical restraint charm. It prevents nasty episodes.

With this and that in mind, I leave thoughts of magic to you. It is your decision whether or not to pursue magical learning, but keep in mind that it is a danger-strewn field of work. This book is not a magic book. I will not teach you spells. In fact, it would be best if you went to a professional to learn. There have been incidences involving exploding bodies of people trying to teach themselves magic without knowing the proper measures. It is, however, ultimately up to you.

OKayy...so this ends with some guidance and warning, I mean that wraps this perhaps a bit better than I expected with how things went in the middle there so I am happy to see this ending here. I think this shows a little bit of potential for this becoming a proper story going forward, but it does feel like almost this is going to be some sort of guide or something rather than a story. At any rate thought, I think it is a fun concept here, but it perhaps needs a little bit more to really come across as interesting here.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall, this is an idea that has potential, but I think you need to work on this a little bit more before it can really work as a good start. With this sort of start you might lose quite a few readers in that info dumpy middle part.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

Ultimately up to you? *snorts* Yes, I'm in the body-exploding business. Haha.

Don't mind me. I love this dude. I love his voice, I can picture it clearly in my mind. I don't know what you picture when you're writing, but...let's leave it at that. Don't destroy my illusions

Bailey, this is brilliant as usual.

I'd have to say that the only part that had me stumped was this one.

Most qualified wizards, witches, hags, and adepts all wear the charm, if only to fit into modern society.

I wasn't sure what you meant, exactly. That wearing the charm is like a trend? That they wear it to pass incognito amongst the non-magic users?

Well, I'm so thrilled to have found something that bothers me. You're not perfect (or I'm just deranged), but it made my review worthwhile

Flyl!