Zilch

by BarrettBenedict
  • September 17, 2006
  • Poetry
  • Other

If you count to ten
Then count to three
You’re thirteen steps ahead of me
But if you count infinity
I’m closer than you’ll ever be

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Elizabeth
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Elizabeth commented · Sun Sep 17, 2006 9:19 am

this was deep, I liked it... and it as worded beautifully... and it was deep... (I love using that word.)

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David Guinness
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David Guinness wrote a review · Sun Sep 17, 2006 1:43 am

For what it is, the poem serves its purpose well. The phrasing and syllables flow comfortably, though I'm not sure whether I would prefer this verse with or without punctuation... I'll have to think on that.

I look forward to reading some more of your poetry!



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