Young Writers Society

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

I really enjoyed this poem. It was fun and entertaining, in the sense that it was very serious. It clearly displayed what you thought to be a serious issue, but also I could tell how passionate you were for it.

My only major comment is the seperation, or lack of. Stanzas are difficult to do in the publishing center, but heres how. Click on the button on the top left, which reads "</>". Then take each part that you want to be its own stanza, and put <p> at the beginning and </p> at the end. Then at the end of each you line, put </be>, to break it. Repeat this for each stanza, and you should be all set. Another simpler, but less appealing approach is to put a - or an * between lines.

I really loved the capitalized words with there own lines, because it was a nice accent. It would have been nice if they had their own indents, however, is a suggestion. You can accomplish that with the coding I showed you previously, because the <p> </p retains white space between it. So, it can be used for that as well.

Overall, great poem! I look forward to seeing more from you! Keep up the great work!

I, honestly, don't really do poetry often, quite frankly. But there are a few times where I had found a poem that had just completely captured me. This was one of those poems, I can gladly say. I really enjoyed this poem, and not because I just say I like all of your work (though I totally and completely do— no lie). I genuinely connected with the poem and found it to be pretty deep. All in all, I just completely enjoyed this lol.