This is terrifying... and I love it. It's detailed and interesting and creates an absolutely horrifying image in my head. The only issue I have is the inconsistency with the ellipsis. Sometimes there are two dots, sometimes three or four and as a personal opinion, I found it a little distracting while reading. Other then that, this is a really well written piece and I'd absolutely love to see where you would take it if you were to ever continue it. Awesome job!
~Mack
Points: 63
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