Young Writers Society

This poem needs some help formatting wise. The content is good. Not that original, but good.

My identity will remain a mystery, Left for you to wonder.
I will become apparent in due time, The game is what you crave.
Navigating the dark is what we do best.
Showing only shadows.
Giving nothing away, Yet, completely involved.

You are the worst thing for me, But I keep running back.
I’ve become addicted, Your taste on my lips.
I want to hold your hand.
I need to feel your touch.
I want to breathe in your life; Giving me a feel of what you are.

I cannot take it. You are all I think about.
The game has worked, You played it well.


My heart is yours.

Hey there! Names Alabaster and I will be reviewing this today or well this morning.

Now, I really do like your style of writing, its sweet and kind all at the same time! I really like it but you do have a few error's in here such as capitalizing the letter I in here and a few grammar works such as putting the comma's in different places and taking them out.
Really other then that, I really like this. Its nice, cute, and just really simple.
Great job!
~Alabaster