On Becoming Woman

by Awakening

Published November 19, 2009

To lay between two hungry hounds,
And bare no violent traits.
To give no power to the fates,
In their capricious state.
Only then the Siren Sounds
Of dependence and excuse
Will have no further use
And set Neurosis loose.
When you break this virgin ground,
The dawn moves to mid-morning.
Now a skeptic, once adoring,
With ne'er a foreward warning,
A better self is found.
For some the morning passes swift.
Others tend to lag and drift.
And the Girls transormed, a precious gift.
Flawless, perfect, pound for pound.

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CreativeFreak wrote a review Review · Nov 20, 2009

Hello! :D Call me Freak.

Well...

Only then the Siren Sounds

Is this a name(Siren Sounds), 'cause other wise I don't know why you capitalized it...

Great job! *Claps appraising* Keep on the good work!

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Brushfire commented Comment · Nov 19, 2009

That was amazing! It had a great flow, and the idea is simple yet unique. On a scale from one to ten, I would rate it nine point nine out of ten. Great work!



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