Young Writers Society

That's really cool getting selected for that Autumn!

But let's get started.

You have no punctuation what so ever which make thing confusing. If you want to do that every place that there would have punctuation that separates - such as commas, semicolons, or otherwise - make a new line. I had to re-read the lines a few times to understand what you were trying to portray.

The second line talks about being filled with something more than one would ever know. That doesn't make sense. Filled with what?

Hi, Bean here to review...

Okay, I did like this poem, but like niteowl said "I find myself confused as to whether it's supposed to be a happy love poem or a heartbreak poem. First the heart is skipping a beat and in love, but then it goes into darkness, but then "you" shows up and suddenly everything is great again. "What is love what is not I do not care" seems weirdly cynical for what feels like it's supposed to be a positive poem about a crush. " I completely agree.
This is a cheesy poem and I love it for that, so thank you for writing this.
You could develop it more, but overall 8/10, would recommend

-bean

Hi there AutumnDawn! Niteowl here to review.

First off, I hate to break this to you, but I'm almost certain that the website that published this piece is a poetry contest scam. I fell for something similar many years ago. These contests make money by offering a free poetry contest, accepting most or all entries, and then charging up the nose for copies of the anthology and possibly other services. These anthologies aren't sold to readers, but rather to the "winning" authors and their friends/family. I would encourage you not to fork out any money to this organization for your "author's copy".

https://winningwriters.com/the-best-free-literary-contests/contests-to-avoid -The place you submitted to seems to be connected to Poetry Press Publishing/songwritingopportunities.com

Okay, so now that that's out of the way, let's talk about the poem itself. I find myself confused as to whether it's supposed to be a happy love poem or a heartbreak poem. First the heart is skipping a beat and in love, but then it goes into darkness, but then "you" shows up and suddenly everything is great again. "What is love what is not I do not care" seems weirdly cynical for what feels like it's supposed to be a positive poem about a crush.

My heart I just don’t speak its language

anymore

Woah! Congratulations!!!