MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
Thank you so much for sharing your writing, my friend My interpretation of this poem is that our main character walks though the Gate of Lions and discovers a wonderful and mysterious land!
She meets the Mystery Girl who teaches her how to use power, and also how to fight. How exciting is that! Our characters use some really cool weapons and spell casting too! Then they enter a haunted castle and can feel enemies glaring at them. This is scary now! It seems like they are searching for some very old ancient ruins.
I love the ending! They both have faith in each other and are not afraid Are you planning on writing part two to this story? I would love to hear what happens to our characters!
Vladimir’s Advice - Suggestions for Improvement
I love the idea of this story and I think you are doing an awesome job! Here are a couple recommendations that I have!
I would love to learn more about our characters! I want to know the name of the main character and who she is. I would love to know what Mystery Girl looks like too!
Another really small recommendation I have, is when you use a comma, add a space before the next word. Let me show you an example!
Sword,lance,shield,calibre and arrows
You could make that into something like this:
Sword, lance, shield, calibre and arrows.
Jack O’Lanterns - My Favourite Parts and Praises
Mystery Girl seems so cool! I love how she smiles are out main character as she is training her. She seems really nice and caring! I also love how our characters are able to enter the haunted castle without being scared! They are so brave! I think your writing is really lovely and I hope you post part two soon, friend!
Black Cat Cuddles - Concluding Ideas and Thoughts
Thanks for sharing this! Have a wonderful day!
Your friend,
-Ellie
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