Friday, August 4
It was a better day today. I have started to make progress. Maybe I hit rock bottom at the hospital and now there is no where else to go but up. I feel like it shouldn’t be okay this fast, but I definitely feel better than yesterday and the few days before that. I still don’t want to talk to anyone or go out, but this is just the beginning of a long and hard journey to the top. I don’t want to be a burden in people’s lives anymore. I will strive to become a key component in life like I was before all of this happened.
Now, I say that I feel better, but I haven’t been into work, I haven’t gone to the store, I haven’t cleaned my house, and I haven’t cooked myself a full meal. I am not showing that I am better. My friends have called to tell me they miss me, but I don’t answer. I am not in any sort of mood to talk to people. Some friends have gotten around it by bringing me a premade meal. Though I appreciate it, I am just trying to avoid any social situations. I know my friends are only going this far because they care about me and are concerned that I am not healthy, but I wish they understood how I felt. Don’t get me wrong, I am trying to reach out. Heck, my friends are the ones that pointed me in the direction of therapy in the first place. I wouldn’t go if I wasn’t making an effort to get better. I am not going to sit here and wallow in my own self pity.
My best friend Theo agreed to come to my house and make sure I am getting ready and then he drives me to therapy. He is my closest friend. His company is the only company I have appreciated this far. He gets me better than the others. He doesn’t expect me to get 100 percent better in the next few days. He is understanding. He is careful. He is kind to me.
This is all I ask for from the others, but it turns out, a group of 25 year old guys who just want to party don’t understand emotions. It is so hard to deal with. I feel like I am being rude, and that is not my intention. You see, I am a kind person. I am usually very sweet and approachable, but accidents like mine can screw up a lot in a person’s mind. It is hard to bounce back from that.
I ended up learning a lot about who I am though. I learned much more about myself during my hospital time and the few days before I went to therapy than I have in the last 10 years of my life. Maybe even more. I have never felt so good with myself, but upset with myself at the same time. These emotions make no sense. I am just getting more and more confused with every second I think about it. I can’t let myself fall behind. I can’t let myself get caught up in the old emotions. I need to focus on getting better. I need to focus on one emotion. Happiness.
-Nicholas
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Hey,
So first things first. I really like how this is written. the character has so much guilt for what he has done and it really show how good of a person he is. The accident was not his fault and he still feels guilty. he is truly a good person. I really like how you wrote how strong he is without actually having to make it obvious. Because he is a very strong and kind character. I don't know I like him.
So I really don't see any mistakes with this chapter and it's just good and short. Not much here to be wrong but it still has value. I don't know if you're going to continue this or not but if you do and need a reviewer you got one right here. Just PM me. So um have a great night keep up the good work and yeah.
-zee
Hello AsTheFlowersGrow! I'm here with a review for Team Weasely!
Inwould like to inform you that I will put my overall thought of, Guilt is the Source of Sorrows, at the end of this review because I will be editing and correcting as I read! So let's get this review going!
"Friday, August 4"
I think you could add t and h after "4" so that I will look like, "4th". Also, add a period.
"I still don’t want to talk to anyone or go out,"
I feel like "go out" isn't the best grammar that could be used here. Perhaps try to find a better word to describe that you don't want to go out. Just a thought.
"My best friend Theo agreed..."
So here you just need a comma after "friend" but otherwise, this is good.
"...my house and make sure I am getting ready and then he drives me to therapy."
Here we have a few minor problems. Nothing that can't be fixed! I would say to take out the "and". It just makes the sentence too long and over used. Put a period after "ready" to end the sentence and then captitalize the "T" in "then". It should look like this, "...my house and make sure I am getting ready. Then he drives me to therapy.
"...I have appreciated this far."
"This" should change into, "so".
Otherwise, this work is wonderful! I really enjoyed reading your work and I am very sorry that you where in an accident! I hope you get--and feel, better soon (on your own time) and I hope that you realize what I am sure of: that you are not a burden to anyone at all. These people who are visiting you care about you and if they though it was a burden to visit you, why would they? Although people can be mean and cruel, there are plenty of nice people in the world who care deeply about their friends and would never think of them as a burden.
I hope this helps and keep writing!
-Gymnast2801