Published May 14, 2005
Ok me and Hunter were talking one night and he was sad so I said this and he said I should post it so here we are.
I will not allow anyone to go through
The depression I've dealt with
My entire life
This smile I wore
Was merely a mask.
Now it is permanent--
And my old face
Is just a mask.
For every second
I held this pain in,
I have beared it.
And now you know
My motive.
The thing that drives me
To help those I love.
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I did like this. It was kind of freewrite and not very poetic, but the emotion made up for it. Very pretty. I think we all have a mask we wear that hides what is really going on inside.
Whenever you feel depressed like that, hug from me
Thank U all!
I like it too..
Short but Strong.. 
It does to me (almost) or at least I understood it.. Nice team work!! , you two!xxx Xia xxx
This smile I wore
Was merely a mask.
Now it is permanent--
And my old face
Is just a mask.
Honestly, we know it was just a mask. Sorry just repitition in the exact same paragraph makes me barf up my oreos.... I liked it oterwise and I can tell you got help... from Hunter.... HI BRO!!
YAY! people like it.
That's really cool! I like it. Reminds me of my freewrite.
lol, actually it srated out as just something he said--no real poetry, just his words! Very odd, and I thought they sounded poetic!