Now this was a great poem. Your use of those words made a great change in the poem. The deep hidden meaning in poem was also great. It was so convincing.
Warmth beneath the ice,
A smile under the frown.
The beggining was just too great. Very well done.
Fluidity flowing from tense nervousness,
Calm grace amid chaos.
You beckon me with a smile
To come and look closer.
Put a comma after 'Calm' and the this stanza was great.
A bond between two strangers,
A new discovery of life.
Two lives connect in love
Because we looked just a little closer.
This was great ending for this poem. But I think it should be 'with love' and at the end it should be 'Because we just looked a little closer.
So, I think this was great. Well done.
And good luck.
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