"There is a prayer that is said after the vows." Oh my goodness, that line is stunning! It was such philosophical and poetic weight. I still feel it echoing in my chest. Also, I love the "I keep imagining this:..." format. Both the sentence itself and the repetition show the persistence and pervasiveness of the imagination. I'm just rhapsodizing at this point, but your imagery is also incredible: "A grain field in the season of rain." "Darting through the early morning mist wearing silver heels. I also love how you say "Singing a harvest song, blessing your name." It implied that even the subjects name is as abundant as the earth. Absolutely extrodinairy poem! Sorry, I don't really have anything to critique. - Yellow Sweater
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