Published March 27, 2009
Everyone loves George is written in front of a live studio cat.
Cat : Damn straight
*Opening theme*
Singing : His name is George and he's a thing, yeah yeah woohoo he's a thing!
Narrator : One day George was sitting in his drawer...doing nothing
George : And I'm not bloody starting now!
(Canned Laughter)
Narrator : Oh George, you are a lazy little thing
(Canned laughter)
George : Well you are an omnipresent bum face
Narrator : One day George was smelling of dog wee
George : I am not!
Narrator : One day George messed himself...four times
George : Thats not true and i have the papers to prove it!
Narrator: I have the papers to prove your mum!
(Crowd "Oooooooh!")
George : That's not big and it's not clever
Narrator : That's what SHE said!
(Canned Laughter)
George : I will burn your face, don't think i won't
Narrator : Yeah sure, BUMFACE!
George : That's it...I'm burning your house down
*George runs off stage and there is silence*
Narrator : Jokes on him folks, i live in a box!
(Canned Laughter)
*George Returns*
George : I burnt your box down...
Narrator : WHAT?! that was my favourite one, my cat was in there!
George : Are cats flammable?
Narrator : Yeah sort of
George : Well it's burnt then
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this was clearly meant to be taken entirely as a joke and not at all seriously because there is basically nothing here except some fairly forced sounding humor and some pretty...unconventional...insults. I have to this one does not do a good job as a random bit made to make people laugh. Most of the humor is very forced and all based on hurting things. Frankly I barely laughed at all.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay wait a minute did the cat just talk to the stage directions...that was pretty confusing as to what exactly that was supposed to be.
Well okay that part was not bad for an opening. I guess there is at least a small laugh from that...you might want to explain how he got in that drawer a little more clearly because at this point its hard to imagine how he is balancing on that thing.
Well that is at least true to reality. The do always play the laugh track at the worst possible times these days.
Okay....I guess that's funny...depending on who you are. To me its not the funniest unfortunately.
Not sure what there is to Oooh about...don't see how that actually makes any sense...now if you put a who or something in there maybe it'll make sense but it seems like a very forced your mom joke.
Well at least points for creative insults in a sense...
Oh dear...I do not approve of burning cats. That is definitely not how I would put humor in something. Sorry...just my opinion.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall it wasn't the best in terms of jokes. Perhaps we just have different tastes in humor but some parts of this were just frankly horrifying. Sorry if I came off as harsh here. That's all that I have to say.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
I understand the reveiw...but unfortunately this is a mickey take, a hoo-haa, a sack of silly and i did not really expect a reveiw, but i like it anyway.
Dog wee is funny, ask anyone!
George lives in a drawer, and he likes it (Katie Perry!!!)
The "Potty Humour" is awsome, i actually think that the entire english language should be replaced with fragments of the word "Dump" and "I did a"
The Studio cat will not be sorting YOUR christmas cards this year i can tell you
Arcaus
Hey, Arcaus.
Also, remember to always capitalize your I's!
First of all, please rate this work PG-13 or R. Not only does it have some language (yes. "damn" is considered language), it has some sexual references as well.
Also, the Other Fiction section is for prose. This is a script. You can ask a moderator to move it to the script section if you'd like.
Hmm, I'm very wary of giving grammar-picky reviews on scripts. Would you like a grammar review? I see many errors with commas and periods. Even if it is a script, it is important to have good grammar. This is a writing site after all.
If you want a quick overall, uhm, I didn't quite understand the point of this. So there is a man named George who sits in a drawer? You never really explained why he was in the drawer, so the whole time I was reading I was imagining a one-inch tall man sitting in a drawer.
Then I got the to the part about George smelling like "dog wee." It was a bit vulgar for my taste. It would have been okay if it was vulgar and funny, but this just seemed like potty humour.
So is this a stand alone piece, or are you going to elaborate on it?
Sorry to be so harsh.
Hope this helped,
Sakura