Young Writers Society

Hey there! This is old but has less than two reviews, so here I am
I think this poem has a good topic and idea. I feel that everyone struggles with self-doubt, and I think you did a good job expressing yours, especially in the latter half of your poem. I read that you're the youngest of six, and it can be hard to be "perfect" and meet everyone's expectations with so many siblings. I have a few things I'd like to mention. These are just suggestions, so you don't have to listen if you don't want to!

Would I get up one day, and hear myself say,
" Wow, what an beautiful day!"

Here, you have two rhyming lines, but then you don't rhyme anywhere else. It sets up a false rhyme scheme. This may have been done unintentionally, or you may have done it on purpose. I personally wouldn't include a rhyme if you aren't going to continue to rhyme throughout the poem, especially since the reader expects you to keep rhyming after rhyming once. But this is just a suggestion, so you don't have to take it! Also, this is the second line you end with the word "day" - the first line also ends with "day." I recommend changing it up in either place to avoid unnecessary repetition.

Wiil I be good enough ? I wonder every day.

"Wiil" should be "Will" And a small thing, you don't need a space between "enough" and the question mark.

Would I get up one day, and hear myself say,

Punctuation is stylistic, but I personally feel the comma after "day" is not needed"

" Wow, what an beautiful day!"

"an" should be "a" And a small thing, you don't need a space between your quotation mark and "Wow"

If my life were with out scandal, it would be

"with out" should be "without"

would ruin us. The pressure is on me to be perfect.
to be a good little girl. Well, it's hard to be good

Since the second line is the continuation of the first line and you don't capitalize the second line, I recommend switching the period at the end of "perfect" for a comma

I like your closing line! And I also like the enjambment you use throughout the poem. It encourages the reader to continue reading the poem, to go to the next line to find out what happens. Overall, I think you did a good job with this poem, and I hope this helped!