Hey Anupama68A, here for a Review Day review,
Positives:
The misty beads danced upon her brow,
As she sang a tune and pebbles threw,
In reflections of her blithe young frame,
Magic once lost was now regained.
The imagery here is good, and I like it as an ending to the poem. To be honest, there's not all that much to grasp onto as it's more of just a standalone that talks about a single woman, but that's okay as long as you want it to be that.
Negatives:
Her dress was made of hues of blue,
It matched the sky and reached her foot.
Doesn't seem to really flow with the previous style of rhyming?
Something else is that it's so short. Just a few stanzas, and then it's over, but I'd like to learn more about this figure. What is she like? What does she do? Where does she live? All these little details that would be interesting to hear about simply aren't here, so we can only guess in our heads. It would be cool to have this lengthened a bit to add in more content.
I give it:
Points: 6987
Reviews: 117
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