Published January 30, 2010
Looking at the stars
Feeling all alone
Feeling like I’ve never felt before
Teardrops rolling by
It all ended with a goodbye
I could never find the reason alone
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Then I met an angel
Flying by in sky
Looking at me smiling that all’s fine
Showing me the bright light
Showing me that I’m not alone
Changing my life and making it how it should be
I found a real friend on my way home
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Never thought it would be this way
You and me and these days
I think someone
Is finally true and pure
No one made me be this sure
About what I really wanted
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‘Cause then I met an angel
Flying by in sky
Looking at me smiling that all’s fine
Showing me the bright light
Showing me that I’m not alone
Changing my life and making it how it should be
I found a real friend on my way home
Oooo yeah
‘Cause then I met an angel
On my way home
~Anshita
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Hello. *Waves hand*
OK, for the most part your lyrics were easy to understand. I'm not a musical person so I can't say if the consistency of your repetition was spot on. But, I can say that I found a line particular meddlesome.
I'm referring tom "I could never find the reason alone"
Sorry, but this just doesn't resonate with me. Perhaps rewording it would help? I won't suggest anything, seeing as I'm not the one writing it. I'm sure you can figure something out.
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thank you so much. I wrote this song for my best friend and I wrote it in like 5 mins. I really thank you for your review, it mans a lot to me..
~Anshita
Before I start i just want you to know that I am unbelievably picky with my music and there are only very few songs I really like. You know what? this song is most definitely one of them! I think your song writing is amazing
PLEASE KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
Thank you so much for you're review. I will keep those points in mind and try and make my song better. Thank you once again
~Anshita
Hello! I'm not always in lyrics, but I thought I'd stop by.
This sounds really neat just by reading it. I could kind of get the feeling for it already! I wish I could hear the music that goes with it. It sounds like it would be so pretty.
I think maybe adding another verse here would help deliver the point of this song. So far, the listener only gets snippets of the story but not quite fully understanding what's happened to the singer. One more verse would probably clear that up for us.
Also, some of the grammar doesn't make sense if you just straight read it. Maybe it's just me, but the sentences should still make sense. They're not hard to fix though, so just read through it, and you'll see what I mean!
I really liked how you ended the song and how the title ties with the end. I always find that so cool!
Keep writing!
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