Published October 25, 2008
2-3 days ago I made some1 mad..she hasn't spoke to me since
I wrote this poem for her. Tell me what you think about it?
you probably despite me
But here’s a poem for you
You may be mad, You may be happy
You may be crying, You may be smiling
You may be hating, You may be loving
You may be remembering
You may be missing
You may have a heart
You may have to start...
to make so many choices
But there’s one choice you can make
To not despite, but forgive
You may not forgive me, but don’t forget
There’s no “maybe”
When I say
I am your friend
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the start is a little bit weird and "Crying" shouldn't be written with a capital letter, and it has no rhymes so...it's really akward.
i liked the last part:
"But there’s one choice you can make
To not despite, but forgive
You may not forgive me, but don’t forget
There’s no “maybe”
When I say
I am your friend"
it's a really beautiful part : ]] love it
well, i hope the things between you and her will be arranged...
*hugs*
don't be afraid and shy, tell her how much she is important to you, tell her about your feeling, she will understand.
have a nice week
Crying shouldn't be capitalized. in fact you are kind of random with the capitalization.
Besides that I didn't find any errors. This is a nice poem and I hope that it lets the girl know that you are sorry for what you did.