I thought the poem didn't really seem to flow at the begining. Also I noticed some spelling errors, but all in all it was a wonderful poem and I hope you post more!
God Bles,
wraithfound
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MY HERO
I have a hero! He is special to me.
His name is daddy.
I remember when I couldn’t see daddy. Mummy said it was cause he was sad.
One day I saw daddy. He cried.
I told him not to because I still loved him.
He didn’t stop.
But I don’t understand daddy what makes you cry so?
I told you, I promised you I will not let you go!
Not again!
Mummy will let me stay I’m sure of it, she will.
If not ill kick and scream until I get ill.
I wont leave you alone.
Not in this lonely so called home.
Alone is not where you should be.
You should be forever with me.
I have a photograph of u and me
And it’s the only time you look happy.
Daddy did I do this, did I make you cry?
Am I the reason you want to die?
Can I change what’s wrong to right?
Or will I loose you again tonight?
Daddy I love you please don’t leave
Or we will both be alone
Daddy
Daddy, I love you
Please don’t go.
I thought the poem didn't really seem to flow at the begining. Also I noticed some spelling errors, but all in all it was a wonderful poem and I hope you post more!
God Bles,
wraithfound
Points: 890
Reviews: 12
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