Young Writers Society

Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.

I can relate to this song a lot because I am an introvert myself and a lot of people just don't understand that I like to keep to myself and remain quiet in stressful situations. Though I am social around my close friends, if I am with other people too much, I will get really stressed out and I can stop wanting to do whatever I was doing. For instance, if I go to a store, I always feel like every adult that stops and looks in my direction is judging me for being 14 and they think I'm what most people are at my age. I'm not like them. I'm different. But they can't hear me- it's just a thought.

The last few lines about it being okay are really cool because I feel like it's what most introverts (myself included) say in many situations, making it very relatable and fluent. I can hear myself saying "I-It's ... O ... kay. It's fine, i-i-it's no big deal, I'm fine, just ignore me." I also like how you state you have lost all faith in humanity, since I have too... at least, in most humans. My best friends like @AlexOfLight remind me that humans can be amazing people that can inspire you to do anything.

Wow, that was a long review. Sorry about that. Have a great Review Day, and never stop writing amazing poems!

~ZeldaIsShiek

Never saw that chord progression. Soon as I replace the broken string on my ax I'll try out.

Hello, this is Londone here to review your work!

I enjoyed this. It had a nice message and I could relate. There were a couple typos, but that can be easily fixed.

The flow, I felt, was thrown off in a couple different places. It almost turned into sort of a rap for me at some points, and that messed with the message a bit. Yet I think you’ve done a really good job catching yourself and staying on track for the most part.

I would really like to have a conversation with you after this song. You seem like you have a lot you want to talk about and a lot of valuable things to say. A lot of lines were very witty and clever, and so they must have come from a person that has those traits.

This was beautiful! I hope to see more from you soon!

Londone

Hello there!

This is Desdemona of WritingWookies here for a review.

I feel like you've done a really wonderful job with this particular piece. You seem to connect with it on a very personal level. I feel that is very important when one is writing a song.

All you have that I've spotted is a few mistakes that I'm sure are just typos and absolutely nothing else. I really like your choice of chords as well, very smooth. Do you play the guitar or the piano?

I am an introvert just like you, and this is a piece I can relate to very, very well. I do wish there were a repeated chorus to give the song a little more stability, as too many different lyrics can get a bit overwhelming in a song, and is not really as catchy as a fixed chorus. However I do feel you could just change that easily by revising your song for a few minutes. What's important for a song is that it makes you feel things. This song makes me see the me who dwells inside. Sometimes it's good to make people look back at themselves and see themselves in a song, this is another aspect of what makes a song very popular.

I feel you've done an excellent job with this song overall. Keep up the good work!

Love,
Desdemona