Hello Anma!
Hope you're doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you're on, obviously. I'm here to give you a review! Let's get right into it now shall we? Alright, so let's begin: This chapter scared me and kind of make me happy. I don't know why happy, I think it was because Lillian did what the boy told her not to. I dunno, I'm weird. XD The thing that made me scared was when the boy was scolding Lillian, I thought he was gonna toss her into the fire! You did a wonderful job with the description, Anma! Now, there were a few mistakes that I saw and would like to point out.
Relief poured through her, there saved.
That bold word in that sentence? It's supposed to be -> their, instead. I used to have that mistake all the time, and it was stuck to me for quite a long time, but thankfully, it's gone now. Note that it still happens to me. Onto the next one, now.
Ppt, in your dreams” she said taking another one.
I feel like you meant to write 'Pft' instead. Because, if you try to say 'Ppt', it's kinda impossible, unless you have magical powers or something, lol. Anyways, that's it! I'm going to go read the next chapter now!! <3
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
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