Hi Roman here to review your work
So I'm really digging your poem, it's emotive and descriptive and is quite easy to imagine.
It really connects with me for some reason, whether it be because it feels to real of because I know the sense of walking a tightrope with anxiety and insomnia on either end of the balance pole.
You personified these 'lets call them road bumps' with great depth which really allows the readers to feel the tense connection. You used your words in such a way that these road bumps don't have a sense of anger or darkness about them but instead they're more humble but unwelcomed. This poem is great for open interpretation as you have made these road bumps less frightening it's could be almost as if you secretly do not wish for them to leave as you fear if they do you will lose something that has walked side by side with you for so long.
'sharing this burden is forbidden' I do not quite understand this line as it just perplexes me is it in the sense that the longing for them to leave is forbidden? or the want for them to stay? it may be good to elaborate a bit on that.
This poem flows extremely well and the grammar is pretty well done
Keep up the good work!
Roman @ovrd0se
Points: 98
Reviews: 3
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