He glanced back around and flashed me a smile, I could feel my cheeks start to burn but smiled back.
What was wrong with me, mrs ice queen herself I usally would wink or smile back. Nicole bust up laughing beside me and and I turned to her.
"Would you just shutup already?"
Once we got to school I felt better because he wasnt around anymore, dont get me wrong he was cute but the way he had me act wasnt cool, I had never had the reaction with any guy before.
"Lynn's in love." Nicole suddenly announced to our friends.
"With who?!" both Amber and Tasha cried.
"No one."
"With Jacob Tanner." she continued. Damn she really knew how to piss me off. Tasha looked at me and said, "You know he has a girlfriend right?"
I nodded, "Yeah and I have a boyfriend."
"Speaking of him, where is Troy?" Nicole asked.
"Right here." and I felt strong arms around my waist.
I smiled as he whispered hi baby in my ear and kissed my forehead. I turned to face him.
"Where have you been?'' I demanded.
He laughed and presented two closed hands, "Which one?"
I smiled and chose the right hand, my smile vanished when there wasnt anything there. He laughed and said try again. I hit the other one and once he opened his hand my smile came back. It was his class ring, he had promised once he got it I could wear it. "This is where I was this morning."
I stood on my tiptoes and kissed his lips, "Thanks."
Troy and me had been together for only a few months but I knew he cared about me. He was on the football team and grade higher than me. I then caught sight of Jacob staring at me while his girlfriend talked to another friend. I knew his girlfriend we had exchanged harsh words once when she decided to tease my little sister and since my older brother jason hadnt done anything to stop it, I had to. Jason was a junior too. I watched my brother walk over to Jacob and Becky, Jacobs girlfriend and give Jacob a high five. Howd he know Jacob I wondered.
"Hey baby, have you even heard a word I said to you?"
I turned my attention on Troy and smiled, "im sorry Troy I guess I zoned out."
He smiled and put his arms around me, "Its okay."
We were than interupted by the bell and had to get to our classes before we were late.
"Ill see you after class.''
I hugged him and walked downstairs to my classroom.
When I got there I stopped in my tracks when I saw Jacob and my brother talking and for a moment thought I was in the wrong class but rememberd looking at my brothers schedule and knew I had saw the same class.
"Hey Lynn."
I could have killed my brother at the moment for calling my name, but I smiled and walked up to them.
"Whats up buttplug?''
Jacob laughed and my brother threw an eraser at me, "Have you met Jacob?"
I smiled and said, "Nope. But Im Lynn."
He smiled and I noticed his eyes were blue with flecks of gold in them. "Nice to meet you."
"If you dont mind, could you all sit down?" Our teachers voice said in a firm tone.
"Great another bitchy teacher." I said and they laughed.
"Im going to assign you to your seats, so when I take roll stand up and Ill move you to your new seat."
She began to assin seats and my mouth dropped when she sat me down next to Jacob, out of all places I mean what are the chances of that? I didnt let my shock show, I just walked up to the front and sat down next to him. When I sat down my boyfriend texted me, destroying any chance of Jacob talking to me.
Thats all I have for now plz crit ![]()
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It's good! I just went to public school (don't ask), and it really catches the mood and train of thought is usually there!
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I only noticed a few grammar errors, and if I was better at fixing some of the trickier ones, I might have helped point them out
But I'm not, so sorry.
Thanks Iam currentally typing some more and by the way this is a true story...it happend to me.
Im still trying to cope with what you will learn later on. Id tell ya but it ruin the story...thanks for all crit
Wow, this was pretty good! As Angel17 said, it is really realistic!
more....!
I really like this. Both parts are equally great. Everything is really realistic and every moment was described in detail giving the reader a lot of imagery from this. Can't wait for the next part!

Also; the part were the teacher assigned the seat to the one person you don't want to end up next to, i could so relate lol.