Published October 6, 2005
My Idol
Why can't i be strong like you?
I look up to everything you do,
The fears you fought
The morals you taught
The difference you've made
The rules you obeyed
You are so strong
You had faith in me all along
You always help people through
And that is why i look up to you.
I wrote this a while back. I'd like to hear your opinions and critisms on it. Thanks.
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I liked it.
It was short and simple and rhymed, I usually don't like rhymes but if you continue to write like this maybe I'll change my mind.
Short but sweet. I like most of it, but the last two couplets seem to have less rhythmic matching than the other couplets.
Also, I need you to go into your profile, find the part that says "Allways allow BBCode:" and click "Yes." That way, you can actually make the bold and such work!