The Gods of Love

Creative!!!!!!!!! I like how you wrote, instead of some cliched sappy poem for Valentines Day, you wrote about the gods. Also, I like how you added some background information on Cupid and Venus. Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!

Ladies and Gentlemen set down your laptops, stand up at your desks, put down you phones, draw a breath and applause, and continue to applause until such time as your hands begin to bleed for this is a poem, except, of course, the footnote which is merely a compliment to the poem.

Hi, Andrew.

It's really nice to meet you. Welcome to YWS! I am GeeLyria and I will be reviewing for you today.

I think it's lovely when a poem ends with a question, because it leaves you thinking and makes you want to read again. I, in all honestly, don't know much about rhyming (when it sounds forced or not), but to me, you have done a lovely job. This is short, concise and entertaining. However, I find the punctuation in the second line to be rather... weird. Maybe awkward; mostly because it isn't something usual, and it distracts the reader from the message a bit. I would suggest you to change them for a comma.

Hm. That's all I've got to say. Great job! Feel free to contact me if you have any questions.

~GeeLyria

I absolutely LOVE greekology. The Greek gods and goddesses fascinate me, so reading this was very pleasuring. And, I enjoyed how catchy it was. Keep up the good work! c:

YAAAYYY MORE GREEK GODS AND MYTHS AND HISTORY! Well actually Roman this time... but ya know. Rather similar. Can we be friends? Please. Any who, lovely piece of work here, great flow and good movement in your writing.

I really don't have much of anything to say against your grammar or word choice, no problems there. Although content wise, you bring out your big guns only for the last two lines. I think maybe you should expand on that sense of the lust of love and how that can become the destruction of me. Certainly put a link in here to Helen of Troy, I know you hinted quietly at it, maybe or maybe not on purpose, but try to add a tad bit more into that idea.

One other quick comment, so your rhyming for just about the entire poem is pretty solid. It's a little shaky and a tad bit forced at "a line so bold," but not a huge problem there. Although the last line, although it makes sense it's just so oddly worded that it sounds awkward and out of place. It's just one of those times that it makes your rhyme sound rather forced. Definitely try smoothing out that line because it sticks out like a sore thumb in comparison to the rest of your poem.

I truely enjoyed reading this Andrew! Keep on writing about those Greeks and Romans, always some of my favorite poems to read. Let me know if you ever need a review! Keep up the good work!

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