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Hi! Welcome to YWS!
Dear beauty who deserves love
Gentle eyes reflecting kindness
Friendly to blue like it a butterfly This line is a bit confusing. Do you meant 'it's'?
A hug for a friend always overjoyed
Digital creation,stunning at most
Yet every word said is sheer brilliance
No one better for music 'for music' sounds a bit... wrong. Maybe you can change it?
Her ears hearing pure beauty
No one can draw better
Each picture made from the heart
What have I done to deserve such goddess?
Surley she'll be the greatest of them all Nice ending
Overall this is a very lovely, heart-felt and simple poem, sweet and fluffy. Good job!
Hope to see you around!
Cheers,
Alpha
Nicely made! You really need divide the poem with a stanza or two, but over all it was good!
Hmm...not bad for a newbie. Anyway welcome to YWS. I am here to review your work. Lets get started. This is a great poem no doubt but it needs some tidying up. Like for instance the poem needs to be divided into stanzas. It has 12 lines so making it 6-6 will make it look quite good. Then again the punctuations-those are not available in this poem. So you need to punctuate it properly. Other than that everything is alright. Good work and you have talent by the way so keep writing.