Time runs ever faster past the eyes
Of those who do not grace its presence here
So obsessed with money, greed and lies
That when time runs out they begin to fear
It is now that they see all that they have missed
All that petty obsessions have dimmed
Somehow clouded in an opaque mist
Until the gap between life and death had slimmed
Have they forgotten how to live with love?
(Save for green paper that they covet so)
Hawks of war forget the docile dove
Until their repercussions start to show
There is absolutely no day but today
Of the sun a fleeting golden ray.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,018 Literary Works • 672,857 Reviews
Thanks for reading it! I'm glad you liked it!
Well might i just say- yum? This poem has some delicious imagery.
I adored you're use of rhyming structure A B A B- ok it wasn't 100% on the mark, all of the time but hey!
I'd have said "by" instead of "in" but hey! we have different writing styles
Loves
Kris
x